Tuesday, March 30, 2010

Dialogue Piece

…fires full magazine of handgun rounds…

“I don’t know what the deal is with me right now. You think it’s just nerves?”

“Probably so, you haven’t shot in a while have you?”

“No, it’s been a while.”

“Well you did pretty good on the first magazine, all 8 patterned as tight as a half dollar, and 5 bulls eyes!”

“Yeah, the first two mags went down fine, but now my hands shaking like a leaf, I don’t get it. It must be my nerves are shot. I need to build back up to where I used to be. Let me try and lean up against this tree.”

…fires another magazine…

“That tree doesn’t seem to be helping much. Maybe you just need to rest a while. You know you can’t expect to jump right back into it and have nerves of steel right off of the bat. You’d have to be like Dirty Harry or something!”

“No, I know. It’s just frustrating. I need to shoot that way every time, I’m too inconsistent”

“It’s just temporary, you can’t rush it. Just work your way from 2 magazines a day to 5 a day to 10 a day over the course of a month or so, you’ll be fine.”

“Yeah, I guess. Let’s set up that larger rifle range so I can rest on the bag and shoot from prone. I’m not going to let my flaky nerves ruin our range day.”

“You got it, take a walk downfield and set up these new targets and I’ll go grab the spotting scope from inside.”

(265 words)

2 comments:

  1. It seems like there is a past event that is getting in the way of your shooting. If there is, you should talk a little about it so the reader understands. If there isn't, you may want to re-word some sentences. Maybe talk about why you stopped shooting for so long, and why you're getting back into it.

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  2. that makes sense. There isn't really a past event, just stopped because life got busy and missed it. I'll think of something

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